初級寫作修改-001

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Today I feel badly.
Because I and my friend not talk happy.She always not to friend­ly to me,because she think I am her friend.But I don’t like this , I have feel­ing . Oh…just ok,time can bad­for­get things.

老師..你看不懂我可以翻譯:)

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我看的懂^^~
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Today I feel so bad because I did­n’t have a good con­ver­sa­tion with my friend. She is always mean to me and she said that’s because I am her friend…But I don’t like it! I also have feel­ings. Oh…it’s okay…time can help me for­get bad memories.

1. 在感覺(feel)的時候用形容詞說出自己的感覺,所以用bad就好不要用副詞badly
2. She always not to friend­ly to 
me 這句明顯沒有動詞，由於妳後面加的是friendly我想你要說的是形容詞，所以前面要用Be動詞
3. time can bad for­get things.這句沒有文法，這句的動詞是forget，在忘記的時候要說忘記什麼東西，不然會看不懂喔!

希望我有幫上忙並且沒有誤會妳文章裡的意思^^

By the way, true friends would care your feelings!!^^~